Postby Mike Farley » Mon 15 Oct 2012, 19:56
Unlike your first zombie image, the subject here does not seem to realise that she is being photographed at that moment. There is nothing wrong with such candid shots, especially as the young woman will be expecting photographs to be taken at the event, whether she is aware or not. It does present difficulties for you as the photographer as a lot of things will be outside of your control, in this instance the pose, lack of eye contact, the background and the person to the left of the image. Some of the girl's hair has been cropped slightly as well - sometimes it is better to shoot a bit wider and then crop later. With today's high megapixel counts, there is a lot of scope to trim and still have enough pixels left to produce a large image.
I would be tempted to crop the top to remove the distracting light area and to the left to remove the other person's blonde hair, which will make the whole composition tighter. There is just enough of the girl's hair on the right that you might not need to crop in a bit, but it is worth experimenting to see what work's best. You could try slightly desaturating and/or blurring the background to make it less obtrusive, or even desaturate the background in its entirety to turn it monochrome, which will make it both make it less noticeable and help the subject stand out. Finally, you might want to tweak the contrast a bit.